DIGITAL REMASTERING COMPLETE! Check ’em out on AllRomanceEbooks!

LukesBrutalAbductionNewIt’s done!  All the Luke, Sam and Colum stories are revised and improved.  Check ’em all out at AllRomanceEbooks, where I’ve finally put all my stuff.  And I’m making some BANK there too!  Their royalties are much more favorable for .99 titles than Amazon or BN (60% vs. 35%), so it really helps me if you buy from them.  EPUB, MOBI, and PDF versions are all available there.  And the first installments in all three of those series are FREE FREE FREE!

So what’s different?  Nothing in the plots, but a lot of the sex scenes are cleaned up, esp. where I went on and on too long with technical details instead of just letting the reader accept that object A is in location B without me drawing a blueprint. For instance, for those of you interested in the sausage makin’ process, here’s the old, WRONG way I did it:

He heard Slader clomp across the floor, fast.  Slader grabbed his left hand and wrapped a fat leather cuff around it, sealing it tight where its underside Velcro’d to itself.  Then he did Luke’s other hand, and grabbed him by his ears.
Luke involuntarily got to his feet, his body trying to ease the pain of Slader’s hands yanking on his ears as if they were bucket handles.  He felt the metal rings in each of the cuffs, cold against his skin, as Slader pressed his hands behind his back and frog-marched him across the floor until he stood under the big pipe in the ceiling.
That was when he saw the hooks wrapped around the pipe, and a second later one hand and then the other were up and locked onto them, his arms nearly extended into a Y.
Then he heard the clink of Slader’s belt buckle, and the flap-flap-flap of the belt being whipped out of the loops of his jeans.  He heard Slader’s breathing, quickening, excited, and then just a whisper of a whoosh as the belt cut the air.
It landed precisely across his ass, and the surprise lasted only a second before the pain set in.  “Ah fuck!” he shouted involuntarily.

RIGHT:

He heard Slader clomp across the floor, fast.  Slader wrapped leather cuffs around his wrists, each one with a metal ring sewn into it. Then he grabbed him by his ears, yanking Luke to his feet.  Slader twisted Luke’s hands behind his back and frog-marched him across the floor until he stood under the big pipe in the ceiling.
There was a dog chain wrapped over the pipe, and a second later his hands were up and clicked into them with double ended leash clips.
He heard the clink of Slader’s belt buckle opening, then the flap-flap-flap of the belt being whipped out of the loops of his jeans.  He could hear Slader’s breath hissing out, then a whoosh as the belt cut the air.
It landed right across his ass, and surprise lasted only a second before the pain set in.  “Ah fuck!” he shouted involuntarily.

Better, right? 🙂

2 Comments on DIGITAL REMASTERING COMPLETE! Check ’em out on AllRomanceEbooks!

  1. Well they both do the trick…I dunno though, I like the first one. Go back and change all of them.

    • Heh your wish is my command, master 🙂 I just wanted to remove some of the choreography, basically, keep up that brutal punishing pace…

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